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do you remember how the earth shook
during afternoon tea, the porcelain
quivering as we moved as gracefully

as tectonics, your magmatic lips
shifting fault lines against mine;
how the waves we watched

on the seismograph haunted us
with its binary of mountain or rift?

        if we are to remain
     static, we will be
         side  
              by side,

            no?


  i do not remember.  



y.


tonight, my legs lay still beneath
a lithosphere of flannel – tired
   
of rubbing against the other –  
remembering earthquakes only kill  

when the things we’ve built
on top of them
                        fall.
ha-



ha.
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:iconelegantfaith:
ElegantFaith Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009   Writer
I think...
I'm shivering.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009
LAVA LIPS
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:icontestsubjectlily:
testsubjectLILY Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
Your supplemental images with your work is admirable.

May I ask
how do you submit an image along with text?
(That's me asking.)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
when you submit a (lit) deviation, choose a preview image.

cheers,
j.
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:icontestsubjectlily:
testsubjectLILY Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
Ahh. PREVIEW.
D:

Thanks,
and keep up the good work. I write short stories and poems when there's nothing to do at school,
and today I was reading your stuff for inspiration :)

(Don't worry, I am not an idea-stealer.)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009
(idea-borrower then? :))
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:icontestsubjectlily:
testsubjectLILY Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009
Hmm, I suppose that works ;P
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:iconmyseity:
mySeity Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
haha, very clever. I'm faving this one :)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
as clever as angsty asian boys get P:


:penguin:
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:icong-r-fracassa:
G-R-Fracassa Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2009  Student Writer
I thought it was amazing and wonderful, but from the comments, it seems that it must be over my head, and thus I must be ignorant and wrong.

Therefore: :+fav:
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2009
lol, i probably fall into the latter category myself.

therefore, textual hi-five.
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:iconquoteouttacontext001:
quoteouttacontext001 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
'You have a way with words' is an insult after reading this.





<3
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
lol, these comments aren't healthy for anybody's ego.


meaning, thanks. P:
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:iconquoteouttacontext001:
quoteouttacontext001 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
Hah, you're welcome. :)
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:iconmidnightinhereyes:
MidnightInHerEyes Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
to carry through such a metaphor such as this is to transport a piece of writing beyond literary terms. this is truly meant for reading, speaking, and pondering.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
i was content to just write it. P:
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:iconkiwigrass:
kiwigrass Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
gorgeous <3
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009
sort of rhymes with 'borges' if you butcher his name.

thanks (:
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:icontinytuned:
tinytuned Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2008
'a lithosphere of flannel' ... if only.
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:icondosubmundo:
DoSubmundo Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
Exactly why i quit geology. Too much drama.
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:iconmetallidaddio:
metallidaddio Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009
lolz
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:iconnyctophobia:
Nyctophobia Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
God, science turns me on. Beautiful. You imbue the hard frames of alleged truth with such romance.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
you leave elegant comments.


thank you.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
logic/feral
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
technologic in a barrel.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
wankiu
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:iconoverfinite:
Overfinite Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
i love this
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
i love grand pianos.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
sponge
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
rag.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
hat
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
that's no way to say goodbye.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
congratulations
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
wrong hat, you nations.
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:icontransparent-things:
transparent-things Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
teeth/hose/howse
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
logic/chi passa per'sta strada
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gomt Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2008
'i do not remember' was what i meant to write, but you did it first. (and i don't mind.)

yum.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2008
yours is a more honest case of forgetfulness.


rum.
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:iconrevolutionnairerouge:
A wonderful piece, though it almost seems as if the only thing that holds x to y is the choice of words and their tectonic imagery. I agree that x > y.
But I don't know much. *shrug*
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
i think x + y > x or y. anyways, words are cheap.

same here. *shrug*
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:iconrevolutionnairerouge:
how synergistic. it's a good thing they are cheap, otherwise we'd be out of luck.
:]
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:iconnotoday:
Notoday Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
Everything about this is swell :)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
like a balloon.
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geekpalace Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008   Filmographer
it's always interesting to see how you structure your poems (e.g. the last word "fall" actually "falling"). this poem is no different. most of the time i get what you are doing, but why the choppiness in the first stanza in the italic part?
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
it's sort of choppy for two reasons (that i can think of):

a) the line breaks offer a second meaning, ie. 'if we are to remain [--] static, we will be' (implying a paradox - in order to exist and avoid the 'haunting binary', they have the option to remain static, but in doing so, they can't love.) plus, visually, the 'side by side' isn't really side by side.

b) a sort of visual caesura/change of tone for the poem.

hope that helps (:
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:iconb1gfan:
b1gfan Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008  Student Writer
:clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008   Writer
x > y
but the whole thing = great


xo!
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2008
haha, thanks :)
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:iconlaretourdemoi:
laretourdemoi Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008
lovely, as per usual.

wonderful metaphors and analogies, as per usual.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2008
as per usual, thanks.
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