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The Great Shaft of '84 by *jonzoiplu:iconjonzoiplu:



I decided that I didn’t like the country, the president’s hair, or the public education system.  My devilish protest began in the sandbox with a shovel stolen from my dad’s shed.  By week two, I replaced Jimmy’s Ritalin with gummy bears to help me out.

We fancied ourselves as runaways, replacing the earth with our heaving bodies and eventually, nothing but heavy air.  It was physically impossible, but everything is possible with children. That’s why I’d have to finish before I was state legal.  We took to our project, fuelled with grilled cheese and the hope of never having to shower or recite the pledge of allegiance again, though Sally’s face lingered in the back of my mind.  Another week in, the surface shrunk to a moon of sky; a month in, a faint star.  In retrospect, we probably should have applied for a grant in subgeology exploration, but I reminded myself of the red tape and the president’s hair.

I don’t know how we got through the layers of bedrock without a proper boring machine.  Perhaps it was our sheer will to power that got us through, but logic was never my forte.  By this time, we probably resembled moles though I saved the flashlight for emergencies, not personal grooming.  From my calculations, we were nearing the centre of the earth, which was rumored to have a molten core, but I had skipped that chapter to throw rotten crabapples at Sally’s friends.  All that mattered was that we kept digging.

One night or day, during a break, we heard a faint beat.  Had the earth began pumping its molten blood?  I had always thought the world to be too cold-hearted, but the sound crept closer.  I envisioned myself roasted in magma gravy, Jimmy scrambling madly before becoming kid flambé; then suddenly, our tunnel wall broke through.  I gripped my eyes shut, but there was no crisping heat, nor barbequing of bones – just more scraping and voices.

Fumbling for the flashlight, I flicked it on.  Startled, there were two coal-covered faces squinting back at us.  As if staring into a mirrored abyss, it had finally gathered the courage to stare back.  Jimmy squirmed.  In broken English, one of the two greeted us with a hello.  I squirmed.  They looked at one another, paused, and piped ni hao.  

It was the most peculiar instant – kids from opposite sides of the world, meeting in the middle.  They told us they were running from their leader’s khakis, the smell of iron in the air, the grip of re-education at their throats.  They wanted to see Elvis’ hips, walk the gold streets of New York, and marry Marilyn Monroe.  Their parents had been exiled to a Northern base to shovel shit popsicles out of a septic system.  The two of them had burrowed away with picks and a bucket of gruel from a labor camp.  After relating their story, they asked for ours.  I explained my dislikes for the nation.  Jimmy said he was in it for the gummy bears.  I told them the truth about Elvis and Marilyn.  A puzzled silence fell over them, then one of them replied that their leader’s hair wasn’t much better, nor the schools.

It was rather quiet before I took out our last chocolate bar and split it into four.  We sat cross-legged staring at each other with candy sitting in our mouths.  I imagined Sally at the back of my eyes, swallowed, then turned off the flashlight.

In the heart of earth, there are four chambers – waiting.

A light dying, a light growing.
©2008-2009 *jonzoiplu
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Author's Comments

Ai Qing, Ronald, Nietzsche, and my escapist childhood.

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:iconvan-schneider:
ah, I know the feeling. Alas for the walls of reality. They seem so soft and alive when you're a child, and yet, as you grow older they die and harden into yet another impermeable shell.
:iconcorpselover7:
<small>Beautiful.

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A thought, even a possibility, can shatter and transform us. -Friedrich Nietzsche

-Moony
:icontinytuned:
haha this is so cute.. literally made me giggle all the way through.
:iconcrown-of-laurels:
Why 84? Orwellian nostalgia?

The concept is wholly original and very affecting. Though 'me' and Jimmy's polyglottism came as a surprise, but all is forgiven in the name of wonder.
:iconjonzoiplu:
i try to limit my bricks. (:

thanks!

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:iconjonzoiplu:
small is beautiful (;

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:iconjonzoiplu:
yay :giggle:

(thanks!)

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:iconjonzoiplu:
a pinch, yes. (it was also a decade after watergate, and the year CSIS was created, if memory serves)

either the kids were part of the bourgeoisie and their parents had given them a secret education before exile (hence the broken english), or 'jimmy and i' watched too many bruce lee flicks.

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:iconparadoxicalshaman:
whats wrong with bruce lee flicks? haha
as far as political spectrums go... i was sort of worried at how obvious it was, but then i realized it fits the category of a child's perspective quite well, because it's never (i don't think) really blatant. anyway, skillfully handled, wonderful story.

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- the faith of wind, betrayed by the trust of birds -
:iconjonzoiplu:
a guilty pleasure, obviously =P (his films contain subtle nationalistic affectations - more than just fists of fury, though i may over-analyze).

thanks for the observation - i certainly didn't want to put my personal opinions in this (i'm pretty politically apathetic), or any commentaries on 'the government' (the arguments of locke and thoreau are enough). mostly the perspective of a child and 'the grass is greener' adage.

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