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insomniac bird


with eyes like marbles
lost in a nervous clamp
of feather and claw

strung out on a branch
a telephone wire buzzing
on a dead line



narcoleptic cat


too tired to yawn
she dreams of birds
who fall in her lap
perfect world.
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:iconinterpolny:
Interpolny Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2008
it made me smile as well. and a nice photo, too :)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2008
thanks (:
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clownscape Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It's a good poem irrespective of any symbolism (if any). They don't occur to my head anyway. You may help me out if there are any. But don't tell me the bird is a cat; the cat, a bird.

Smile.
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jonzoiplu Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008
(:
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canislupusaeterna Featured By Owner May 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I am such a narcoleptic cat at times (when I am an insomniac wolf...)
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 30, 2008
i suppose the two fight for your soul.

(thanks)
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canislupusaeterna Featured By Owner May 31, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Of course mine poetic genius friend.
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Misplaced-Karma Featured By Owner May 27, 2008
*Pseudo-intellectual complimentary statement pontificating upon an obvious quality inherent within the poem*
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
you could have just said 'chewbacca eats panties'.
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mySeity Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
so...tactile. it\'s what I needed this late at night :heart:
I\'ve missed your writing.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
:aww:

(sleep would be tactile as well, i would think.)
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lpowell Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
I\'m in the middle of an existential crisis. I don\'t know, I like this poem now for some reason. Its simplicity winks at me bemusedly, like a friend telling an inside joke.
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
well, from a previously - wait - still-existentially-anxious person to another, you have my sympathies.

p.s. does the inside joke involve sartre?
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lpowell Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
It should—they're music is lulling enough. Sleep.
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:iconlaretourdemoi:
laretourdemoi Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
short and to the point. well done.

have you ever read anything by Gregory Corso?
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:iconjonzoiplu:
jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
like a thumbtack.

i haven't. i'm pretty under-read when it comes to literature. any suggestions?
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laretourdemoi Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
i haven't read much of him, but in 10th grade i did an explication of his poem "Last Night I Drove a Car". he's brilliant. very Kerouac-esque.
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rabiya-aysu Featured By Owner May 26, 2008
i like how you have taken two completely opposite states of sleep and tied them together very smoothly.
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3toneburst Featured By Owner May 25, 2008
This made me smile, thank you.
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jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
(:
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arachibutyrophobic Featured By Owner May 25, 2008
ah, who knew the intricacies of animal life? your piece managed to bring forth a not-entirely-clinical view of a commonly seen form of warfare ... well done.
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jonzoiplu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
heh, 'clinical view'. thanks (:
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